這篇筆記： 寫科技題一定會用到的搭配詞，附我作文裡的原句與修正；再拆解無人車（6.5）和面對面溝通（7）兩篇的原始段落，看秤重和例子怎麼影響分數。
科技與媒體｜共 3 篇
- 1. 常考題目與正反論點庫
- 2. 搭配詞與兩篇段落拆解（你正在讀）
- 3. 廣告拆解、秤重示範與練習
三、核心詞彙與搭配詞：寫科技題一定會用到的字
| 搭配詞 | 我作文裡的原句（出處） | 更自然／升級寫法 |
|---|---|---|
| communicate in person | keeps individuals from learning the capability of communicating in person（面對面溝通） | prevents people from developing the ability to communicate in person |
| body language / facial expressions | take care of others’ feelings through their facial expressions and sign language（面對面溝通） | sign language 是「手語」，這裡應為 gestures |
| deprive sb of sth | using mobile phones and computers deprives us of learning how to know others’ feelings（面對面溝通） | deprives us of the chance to learn how others feel |
| coherent sentences | we can send a wide range of short phrases instead of coherent sentences（面對面溝通） | 很自然，可以直接用 |
| lower expenditure | driverless vehicles are more economical, lowering expenditure on companies（無人車） | lowering costs for companies |
| be powered by electricity | most of those cars are driven by electricity（無人車） | powered by electricity（driven 會被讀成「被駕駛」） |
| job vacancies | results in the decrease in jobs vacancies（無人車） | results in a decrease in job vacancies |
| catch customers’ attention | it helps producers to catch customers’ attention from various brands（廣告） | 很自然；from 可改 for |
| on a regular basis | keep seeing an item’s picture … on a regular basic（廣告） | basis（basic 是形容詞） |
| fake advertising | With increasingly cases of fake advertising（廣告） | With an increasing number of cases of false advertising |
| algorithm | （我沒用過，補充） | algorithms recommend content based on users’ browsing history |
| retraining / upskilling | （我沒用過，補充） | provide retraining programmes for displaced workers |
| screen time | （我沒用過，補充） | limit children’s screen time：小孩用手機題必備 |
四、我的實戰段落拆解：從 6.5 到 7
以下段落是送出批改的原始版本，未修改；分析是我對照公開評分標準自己整理的。
拆解 1｜無人車（Cam16-4，Outweigh）：6.5 分，少了「秤重」
原文：缺點段
Those opposed to the usage of driverless vehicles due to the following two reasons. First and foremost, the usage of those cars results in the decrease in jobs vacancies, leading to high unemployment rate in related industries. In other words, when driverless vehicles replace the traditional ones, those drivers will definitely lose their jobs. Secondly, the concern of road safety will increase simultaneously if the driverless vehicles are used on the roads. For instance, car accidents may happen easily without the supervision by humans.
這篇的主要問題：Outweigh 題問的是「優點是否大於缺點」，但整篇只是優點一段、缺點一段，從頭到尾沒有比較兩邊的分量。結論說優點較大，理由也只是重複「省錢、環保」，沒有說明為什麼省錢比失業更重要。這是 Task Response 只有 6 的關鍵。
段落本身：第二個缺點（安全）只有一句主張和一句很短的例子，跟第一個缺點相比明顯單薄。而且第一句 Those opposed to … due to 少了動詞（應為 Those who oppose … do so for two reasons）。
內容上也有一個邏輯漏洞：優點段說無人車「大多是電動的，所以環保」。但「無人駕駛」和「電動」是兩件事，有人駕駛的電動車一樣環保。這種論點很容易被認為和題目關聯不夠緊密。
改寫示範（加入秤重的段末）
Admittedly, the loss of driving jobs is a serious concern. However, this transition is likely to happen gradually, giving governments time to retrain drivers, whereas the safety benefits of removing human error could save lives every day. For this reason, I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
秤重的核心句型是「承認缺點 → 說明缺點可以被處理或影響有限 → 說明優點更根本」。完整拆解在無人車 6.5 分範文，秤重的寫法在Outweigh 與優缺點題型。
拆解 2｜面對面溝通（Agree）：7 分，例子貼合論點
原文：第二個主體段
Another factor supporting my opinion is that we lose the ability to think rapidly. If we are talking with others face to face, we need to carry out appropriate responses in a matter of seconds. Besides that, impolite and rude words ought to be avoided, and complete and logical sentences should be made. Nevertheless, people can never practice this capability before trying to chat in person. For instance, when we use the LINE application to talk with others, we can send a wide range of short phrases instead of coherent sentences. In addition, users can remove those inappropriate ones as long as the message remains unread. Hence, when people overuse those digital communication tools, they lose the ability to think fast and generate ideas quickly.
好在哪：Coherence 拿到 8。這段的論點是「失去即時反應的能力」，而例子剛好精準對應兩個面向：①LINE 上傳短句，不用組織完整句子；②訊息未讀前可以收回，不用一次就說對。例子的每一個細節都在證明論點，這是我覺得它比其他段落好的地方。
可以改的地方：Nevertheless 用得不太準，前一句講面對面的要求，這句要接「但網路上練不到」，用 However 更自然；people can never practice this capability before trying to chat in person 語意繞，可改為 online chatting offers few opportunities to practise this skill。另外 never 太絕對，改成 rarely 比較穩。
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